Lincoln Movie Paraphrase Practice
"Lincoln believed slavery was immoral, but he also considered the 13th Amendment a masterstroke in cutting away the financial foundations of the Confederacy. In the film, the passage of the amendment is guided by William Seward, his secretary of state, and by Rep. Thaddeus Stevens, the most powerful abolitionist in the House. Neither these nor any other performances in the film depend on self-conscious histrionics; Jones in particular portrays a crafty codger with some secret hiding places in his heart."
- Robert Ebert
My paraphrase of the selected passage:
President Abraham Lincoln saw slavery was wrong and against his personal belief. He also knew that the 13th Amendment as a key piece in dissolving the establishments of the Confederates movement in the civil war. The movie, includes a statement stated by strong Republican leader Thaddeus Stevens who was against slavery, and by William Seward, who at the time was President Lincoln's secretary of the state, in which they address the 13th Amendment. None of the acts in the movie portrayed the idea of self conscious like Stevens and Seward's speeches for the 13th amendment. The actor Jones, who was seen as a radical republican shows how he is wise in what he contributes to the house in his testament for the 13th Amendment.
posted by Bryce Johnson @ October 18, 2018
6 Comments
6 Comments:
This is unacceptable, your paraphrase is incredibly close to the original and it seems like many words or order was just changed.
Some of the words in this are very similar such as masterstroke being one of the biggest and most noticeable to me.
The paraphrase jumps around a lot to different ideas without any transitions.
Good use of language. I get what you writing.
Excuse me!?! Many of the same words in the original are used in your paraphrase.
Please make the changes we discussed, including eliminating the use of words from the original (masterstroke). While it is acceptable to reorganize the flow of sentences from the original, it's better to do so in a way that does not change or jumble meaning.
Here is my paraphrase of the original text - use it to help make sure you understand the meaning of the original text and then edit and revise your own paraphrase so that it captures the author's meaning in your words, as I capture it here in my words:
From Lincoln's perspective, slavery was wrong. However, he also was fully aware that by ending slavery, he wasn't just doing the right thing - he was also doing something that was really going to hurt the Confederacy, which depended on slavery for its economic survival. The movie shows how secretary of state, William Seward, as well as Congressmen Thaddeus Stevens, a leading opponent of slavery, helped to get the 13th Amendment passed. The actors in these roles, like those who play the film's other characters, don't rely on overly-dramatic, showy performance. Exemplifying the subtly of these actors is Jones, who portrays Stevens as a clever old guy who is maybe keeping some very important personal things to himself.
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